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----------------------------------------------INTRO
The world was in an age of exploration.
Looking for new lands, man uncovered the relics of ancient cultures.
<EDIT>
Add ellipsis at end.
As time passed, many legends began to surface
<EDIT>
Put ellipsis at beginning and period at end.
A legend from each ruin, a legend from each culture...
Various relics were found in the ruins.
One of the legends told of strange statues in the shapes of spirits.
<EDIT>
Coma to question mark. Change to, “the ruins didn’t say.”
What was a spirit to the ancient people, the ruins don't tell us.
<EDIT>
Wording.
People who entered the ruins, searching for wealth, went in and were never seen again.
<EDIT>
Coma to period. Also the second say should be said. Past tense consistency and all that.
Some said there were traps to protect the treasure, others say it was a
curse.
No one thought these ruins would bring about disaster.
STARTING ADDRESS - 048CF0
ENDING ADDRESS -
SCHOOL
<EDIT>
UNNECESSARY ELLIPSIS
WILL: My name is Will. A year has passed since I went to the tower of Babel
with my father. My father and his party met with disaster. Somehow, I made
it back to South Cape... I still can't believe my father is gone. I'll
never believe it... When I grow up, I'll be an explorer and see the world.
Somewhere, I will meet my father.
TEACHER: That's all for today's lesson. You four do your best not to fall
behind. Demons have appeared outside of town. If you go very far, you must
go with your parents.
SETH: I'll see you guys at the usual place!
<EDIT>
Will doesn’t have a living mother. He lives with his grandpa and grandma. This would be extremely insensitive. Though this would only be apparent to someone who has already played the game.
ERIK: I have to go home first. I'll see you guys there later. If you don't
hurry home, your mother will think that you were kept after school.... Heh
heh heh.
<EDIT>
Change to “See you at the cave by the seashore.”
LANCE: Like always, the cave at the seashore!
<EDIT>
I love foreshadowing.
TEACHER: Oh, Will. Please recite with me. The world shines brightly through
eternity...
SOUTH CAPE - OUTSIDE
<EDIT>
Change to ellipsis to question mark.
MAN: Hey, Will. How many times have I told you not to come up here... You
have a habit of jumping down from places. Well, I guess I can't really stop
you.
DARK SPACE
<EDIT>
This is a lot to swallow at once. How can you explain a temporal rift with a giant talking head in such small space without having it be so precipitous?
GAIA: I am Gaia, the source of all life. I will help you on your journey.
Only one with the Dark Power can see this space. You are the chosen one.
In the dark space you can record a travel journal. Stop there before you
depart.
GAIA: Record what's happened so far?
+ Record
+ Don't Record
If 'Record'
GAIA: Finished recording... Continue your journey?
+ Yes
+ No
If 'Yes'
GAIA: Then go.
If 'No.'
GAIA: Then rest a while.
Back Outside
<EDIT>
I’d like to refrain from breaking the fourth wall if at all possible.
MAN: You look like a fast runner. To run, push the Control Pad twice.
SALESMAN: I travel around to people's houses selling weapons used to fight
demons. We may live in troubled times, but I won't sell a weapon to a
child.
<EDIT>
Should say “alone.” It’s a small town. We can assume people know that Will doesn’t have parents.
TOWN GUARD: Hold it! Many demons are prowling outside the town. Didn't your
teacher warn you not to leave town without your parents?
<EDIT>
Move lately after business for structural reasons for clarity. Also, this is the end of a sentence so there is no need for an ellipsis.
WOMAN: I'm worried. There's been a lot of strange merchants lately doing
business...
<EDIT>
In order to justify the ellipsis the statement should end mid-scolding. Also, portraying Will as more of a child at the beginning of the game does more to make this a coming of age story as well.
WOMAN: Oh, no! What are you doing! This child! Honestly...
<EDIT>
I understand why. Is that supposed to be a complete statement? Combining the last two sentences will resolve this issue.
WOMAN: I feel sorry for Seth. I understand why. He hates to see his parents
fighting every day.
<EDIT>
There are four periods here. An ellipsis followed by a period is unnecessary. Just remove one.
WOMAN: I envy you when I see the sea breeze blowing your hair like that...
Not like mine, under this scarf....
MAN: My astronomer friend said something very strange: a star is
approaching the Earth.
Schoolgirl Section
LEADING GIRL: 1..2..3..4..5..
GIRL: How long have we been playing this?
GIRL: It's strange. This game is like "Red Light, Green Light"...
LEADING GIRL: 6..7..8..9..10!
DOCK
<EDIT>
Consider changing it to “get it up” Everyone loves a well hidden sexual innuendo.
FISHERMAN: Even if I move to another place, I can't pull it up...
FISHERMAN: Gosh, I can't pull it up...
<EDIT>
Should say “I lifted.” Every other message is spoken by the fisherman. Consistency.
DIALOGUE: He lifted the strange teapot.
SETH'S HOUSE
<EDIT>
This sounds like third party narration and has a past tense to it. The narration should be obviously from Will’s point of view and in this case should be in the past participle.
WILL: No sooner was the door to Seth's house opened than a jar came flying
out!
<EDIT>
First exclamation point should be a question mark.
SETH'S FATHER: What's wrong with having a little fun with my hard-earned money!!
<EDIT>
The second sentence should end with an ellipsis, not an exclamation point.
SETH'S MOTHER: It's no joke! That man! I put up with it for Seth's sake,
but if it weren't for him, I'd have left long ago!
LANCE'S HOUSE
WILL: This is Lance's house. He lives here with his frail mother.
LANCE'S MOTHER: Your father has been lost at the Tower of Babel for a year
now... It seems like only yesterday...
ERIK'S HOUSE
<EDIT>
These are Will’s thoughts. WIll shouldn’t refer to himself in the third person during inner-dialogue. Also, what’s with the ellipsis obsession? This game! Honestly...
WILL: My friend Erik lives here. This is the biggest house in South Cape.
Will envied people born to rich families...
<EDIT>
UNNECESSARY ELLIPSIS!
ERIK'S FATHER: Everyone is jealous of this big house... It's nothing. We
moved to this town before anyone else.
WOMAN: It's the little things in life that make you rich or poor. Well,
heard any good stories?
<EDIT>
UNNECESSARY ELLIPSIS!
ERIK'S MOTHER: Don't worry, I'm not on fire. It's just a treatment for my
sore body. Cleaning this big house all day makes my brain ache...
WILL'S HOUSE
WILL: This is my house. The pie that Grandma Lola is making smells really
great.
LOLA: Welcome home, Will. Dinner isn't ready yet. Go outside and play for a
while.
BILL: Coming home at this hour probably means you had to stay after school
again. Ha ha. Excellent! Even if a boy can't study, he should show a little
initiative.
SOME HOUSE
MAN: Mmmm, nice smell. There's no stove, so I'm cooking in this pot.
SEASIDE Cave
<EDIT>
How is this narration from Will's point of view? Rewrite!
WILL: It was natural for the four friends to call this seaside cave their
second home. Usually, when lessons were done at the school, they gathered
there to talk and play games until sundown.
SETH: Ah ha ha. I'm going to win again for sure.
LANCE: What is it, Will? It's late. I'm playing cards with Seth. Wait a
minute.
<EDIT>
Should be rushes not rushed. All narration is present tense for the sake of consistency.
DIALOGUE: Suddenly, Erik rushed in with a desperate look on his face.
ERIK: Ah! News! Big news! The Princess of Edward Castle has run away! They
say she came to South Cape!
<EDIT>
How would lance know Kara? Erik has a crush on her? This doesn’t make sense and needs to be changed entirely.
LANCE: That's all? You came in such a hurry that I thought something
really big had happened! The princess is probably that spoiled girl, Kara..
The one you like so much!
<EDIT>
Take out the liar part. It’s in reaction to the above statement, which needs to be edited.
ERIK: LIAR! Maybe the soldiers will come here looking for her! The soldiers
from Edward Castle look so cool. I want a steel helmet, too.
LANCE: Will, get over here and sit next to Erik.
SETH: I'm not interested in girls. I like adventures better.
<EDIT>
UNNECESSARY ELLIPSIS!
ERIK: And I thought everyone would be surprised...
SETH: Everyone's here. What should we do today?
<EDIT>
Someone else should be mentioning that they haven’t seen it (Seth).
ERIK: I want to see Will's mysterious power. You haven't seen it? He can
move things without touching them.
LANCE: He moved the statue that's in the corner of the cave. Will. Show me
again.
LANCE: Oh! It moved!
<EDIT>
Change to “Man, if I could do that...” This justifies that stupid ellipsis that I’m coming to hate.
ERIK: If I could only do that...
<EDIT>
The conversation about hinted that Seth hadn’t seen Will do this before. Were the translators trying to build in continuity issues? Also, the ellipsis.
SETH: No matter how many times I see it, I'm still amazed. But why can you
move the statue when you can't move anything else...?
<EDIT>
Change to “Now, pick a card, any card.”
LANCE: Next. Pick a card, any card. I'll put the cards face down. Pick the
one you think is the Ace of Diamonds.
LANCE: Pick the one you think is the Ace of Diamonds.
DIALOGUE: Will picks up a card. It is the Ace of Diamonds, of course!
<EDIT>
Obviously a direct translation for Japanese into English. We don’t tend to go “Ahhh!” when we want to congratulate someone.
LANCE: Ahhh! Right!!
<EDIT>
You’re speechless, yet you keep on talking?
Erik: I'm speechless... Hey, Seth. This is some type of psychic power,
right?
SETH: Yeah, it must be some kind of psychic power thing. If I didn't know
any better, I'd think it was magic. Most people have five senses... sight,
hearing, taste, smell, and touch. I think Will's psychic power is some kind
of sixth sense.
<EDIT>
Lance is too well spoken in claiming to be too simple to get what’s going on. His response should be more along the lines of, “What are you talking about?”
LANCE: What Seth says is too complicated for me to understand. Seth. Let's
play one more game.
<EDIT>
Change to, “With your power, I could beat Seth.”
LANCE: One more game with Seth and I'm going home.
Seth: Ah ha ha. I'm going to win again for sure.
OUTSIDE
<EDIT>
Past tense and third person. Both are wrong. Maybe it should be something like, “I didn’t realize it was so late.”
WILL: It was already dark by the time Will left the cave.
WILL'S HOUSE
WILL: The pig's wrecking the room! But why is there a pig in my house?
PIG: Oink oink
<EDIT>
Change “Is this your house?” to “You’re WIll right?” She’d know who he is because she was just talking to Lola and Bill.
KARA: Hamlet! You shouldn't snort at strangers! Is this your house?
WILL: Yeah... so?
KARA: Frankly, you look a little shabby...
<EDIT>
UNNECESSARY ELLIPSIS!
WILL: Well, excuse me...!!
<EDIT>
Not very proper for a princess. Also, since she knows Will’s father is Olman and is lost, then she wouldn’t say something so cruel. Maybe she should introduce herself?
Kara: Your father? Mother? Not here, huh?
KARA: Is this a picture of your parents?
<EDIT>
This ellipsis isn’t unnecessary, just unnecessarily long.
WILL: My father's an explorer, he.....
KARA: I know. Olman, the explorer. They say he was lost.
WILL: He'll come back some day.
<EDIT>
There should be some delays here. And perhaps worded a bit better. It just doesn’t seem to fit.
KARA: Are you sad? ... No? I'd be sad, if it were me. I'm sorry...
KARA: Anyway, is there a piano here?
WILL: No, there isn't! But Grandma Lola is a great singer.
<EDIT>
No need for the double exclamation points.
KARA: They're singing upstairs now. They have such loud voices!!
<EDIT>
Get rid of the opera and the ellipsis and make it “When I sing I lose track of the time, so dinner isn’t ready yet.”
LOLA: Welcome home, Will. When I sing opera, I lose track of the time...
Dinner's not ready yet.
BILL: Oh, my! I haven't sung like this in a long time. Your grandmother
Lola used to be a singer. I fell in love with her voice. That's why I
married her.
<EDIT>
Get rid of the double exclamation points. Change the last two sentences to something to the effect of, “Will, did you meet Kara yet? She was just singing with us...”
LOLA: Ah ha ha. Oh, you!! Bringing up a thing like that! Will, you
shouldn't be surprised to hear that. The girl who was singing with me a
minute ago...
VOICE (KARA'S): No-o-o-o-o!!!
DIALOGUE: A scream from downstairs!
BILL: It's that girl screaming!!
SOLDIER: Princess! I've been looking for you!
KARA: I don't know you. Be gone!
SOLDIER: What are you saying? If I don't take you home, I'll lose my head?
KARA: What do I care if you lose your head?
SOLDIER: Princess! Do you think I have nothing better to do than chase you
down? I must take you home. It's the King's orders!
<EDIT>
Melodramatic. She should thank Lola and Bill rather than give away a romantic interest in Will. Things don’t need to be so obvious.
KARA: I'm sorry I lied to you. I'm King Edward's daughter, Kara. Will. I
feel as though we've met before, as if we were good friends.
[Soldiers take Kara away and Hamlet follows. Both Bill and Lola sit down at
the table.]
<EDIT>
Wow, this line is stupid.
BILL: So, that girl likes to play practical jokes. Heh heh heh.
LOLA: Edward castle... There's a big viaduct under the castle. Your
grandfather designed it.
WILL: What! Really?
BILL: I used to be an architect.
BILL: There's a prison under the castle. It's built like a maze to keep
prisoners from escaping. I feel bad that I built a prison where people
disappear and are never heard from again.
LOLA: Enough serious talk. Let's eat dinner. I made a delicious pie. Let's
sit at the table upstairs.
BILL: Will, do you think Lola's meals have been a little strange lately?
Last night, licorice and rice. Before that, mouse fritters. I can't stand
it anymore! Sometimes old people, if they're surrounded by problems, get a
little forgetful. Maybe there's something bothering her that she can't talk
about...
<EDIT>
WIll’s point of view, should be first person.
WILL: We sat down to a feast of snail pie... with whipped cream! I only got
one piece, but Grandpa Bill ate half the pie. That night Will dreamed that
Kara and he took a journey around the world...
DIALOGUE: And the next morning something began to happen...
[Downstairs.]
BILL: I had more snail pie for breakfast. I left you a slice.
LOLA: Good morning, Will. A letter has come for you from King Edward.
DIALOGUE: This is what is written in the letter.
Bring the Crystal Ring from Olman's things to Edward Castle.
- King Edward.
<EDIT>
Should be song not spell. Lol hummed a sweet melody should be in narration text color.
LOLA: I've been in a bad mood ever since I saw this letter. Oh, Will. I'll
teach you a spell. When I'm upset, humming this tune makes me feel better.
Lola hummed a sweet melody.
<EDIT>
First person perspective.
WILL: That's pretty. Even though Will had never heard it before, it seemed
oddly familiar.
<EDIT>
Will learned Lola’s melody.
DIALOGUE: You've learned Lola's melody.
LOLA: Be careful.
<EDIT>
UNNECESSARY ELLIPSIS! Also, change the ‘we’s to ‘you’s and could to should.
BILL: A crystal ring...? Never heard of it. There's something in the
luggage your father, Olman, left behind. Maybe we could go to Edward
Castle. We could see the princess. Heh heh.
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SEASIDE CAVE
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LANCE: It's a day off from school. Let's have some fun.
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OUTSIDE- Leaving
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TOWN GUARD: King Edward has summoned you to the castle? Well, just be
careful.
To do:
Check for grammatical, punctuation, tense and other syntactical errors
Find contextual and continuity issues
Pose possible corrections
Work in James Lovelock’s Gaia Theory in greater detail (Where all life is a single developing organism)
Add more historical and mythological context without diluting the character driven plot
